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Title: Saturation,
Chapter: Two,
Beta: None,
Notes: Takaba's POV. Summary, Pairings, Disclaimers, in-depth Ratings and Warnings can be found in the First Chapter's head- and footnotes. Ratings are based on each chapter not the overall fic. This chapter is 17+ for BDSM, lemon, non-consent, prolonged torture and psychological trauma,
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-- 02 --
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The thick hardness in him seemed to throb to the rythme of his heartbeat. Takaba shook his head desperately, trying to clear the heavy haziness in it. Or he thought he did. It was hard to think. Hard to know if his body was doing what his brain was telling it to do. His limbs didn't seem to be attached to his head. Everything seemed to be doing its own thing.

Looking down he could see his penis arch away from his body. It was angry and red, cloudy pre-cum was dripping slowly from the smooth, swollen head. It thwacked wetly against Asami's flat, muscled stomach with every move the older man made against him. He swallowed, wanting to cry at the startling pain and scream in pleasure all at the same time but unable to do neither.

He was so scared he could barely breath. Scared of the pain. Scared of the pleasure. Scared of what Asami could make him do next. Make him do it as if he, Takaba Akihito, wanted to do it. As if he had any control over what's happening.

"You don't even like me," he heard himself moan.

He hadn't meant too but he'd managed to bully his legs into supporting him in order to lift himself up. He just forgot Asami's broad hands was holding his hips down and only succeeded in shifting the painful fullness inside of him to hit something that sent sparks of crackling fire and ice up his spine.

"Like is not needed for this act, Takaba. Neither is love," Asami murmured after a moment of silence.

He could hear the amusement and thickening arousal in the man's voice. Asami might have been savoring the feeling of what Takaba had accidently did. At the thought he shivered and Asami's fingers dug into his hips.

"Yes," Asami hissed, leaning towards him, "do that again."

"No!" Takaba felt tears burning trails down his cold, cold face. It made the man's face disappear in a pale blur. He was glad. He never could lie effectively and with his eyes level to Asami's disturbingly sensual lips Takaba's hair-trigger stubborness was no-where to be found.

"Pouting," Asami said, "is not attractive on anyone over the age of seven."

"Neither is rape!" He shouted back at the pompous man, "At any age!"

Asami surged to his feet and Takaba, startled and horrified, heard himself scream at the overwelming fullness threatening to puncture his guts. He'd felt the sharp, tearing pains around his rectum which did a marvelous job of clearing his brain and rendering him speechless for a few heartbeats. He went completely limp and felt Asami nearly lose his hold on him.

Asami hitched his legs up over his arms in a position that had them both arching their backs involuntarily. Takaba realized his torso was almost parallel to the floor. In this manner the erection inside of him was even more...pronounced. The shock and pain from it kept him from fighting back in any effective manner.

In a dim corner of his gibbering brain Takaba realized the older man was furious. Why? Wasn't Takaba the one being raped? Then Asami jerked him upright, shattering all coharent thought, in a move that had their chests nearly touching. It surprised a soundless, sobbing cry from him and sent boiling bolts of pain up his insides. In that moment the pain-wrapped pleasure was him.

With their lips nearly touching Asami snarled through gritted teeth, "Tell me I'm raping you. Say it!"

His entire body clenched helplessly at the tone and the sizzling pain made him feel as if his ass was on fire. Asami's penis actually pulsed, the odd sensation registered inside his pelvis at the same time as Asami spoke and he shook his head, literally unable to understand the words. He was hanging in mid-air, supported only by Asami's apparently effortless strength and the chains hooked to the bicep-to-wrists arm sheaths.

"It hurts!"

The exclamation came out in a series of wet stutters and shrill gasps that rendered his own voice almost unrecognisable. He didn't even realize he'd said it out loud until Asami answered in a gentle, almost contrite voice, "Of course it does."

"Please," Takaba tried to say. He couldn't produce anything above a whispery rasp. The hot saltiness of the tears trickling down his face added to the pain in his throat. "Stop this. Take it out -- I'm sorry!"

"No, no, don't," Asami groaned as he lifted Takaba's hips and pulled him down again in agonizingly steady, measured movements, "The way you beg makes me want to hurt you even more. Don't say anything now."

The slow, deliberate rythme had Takaba's flaccid penis swelling up much to his private shame over the bewildering pleasure. At the last possible moment Asami would jam himself into Takaba's ass and they both couldn't stop the shudders. But it wasn't enough!

"Please...Asami--" Takaba moaned at the feeling of the full slickness grinding against his prostrate, or whatever it was that gave him those jolts of bone-melting pleasure amidst the pain. He finally screamed, "Harder!"

Asami responded with an explicit curse that made Takaba's already engorged penis become even harder. With a lunge and a jerk, Takaba's arms came free from the hook and he cried out as blood rushed into them, causing them to itch and prickle as if a thousand needles was randomly poking him everywhere. The painful sensation added to the severe pleasure he felt with every jarring bounce of Asami's steps. It had him wriggling like a worm on a fishing line in pending orgasm.

"Asa--!" His eyeballs felt as if it had rolled to the very back of his head as the orgasm ripped through him with all the destructive force of a nine on the Richter scale. For a second or two he'd actually seen hot, silent fireworks explode behind his eyelids.

He must have greyed out when his back slammed against the cold glass of the picture window and thus awakening him back to painful reality. He blinked the sweat out of his eyes and tried swallowing but his throat was too dry.

Was those harsh, gutteral grunts coming from him? He couldn't stop the sounds. With Asami ruthlessly hitting that hard knot of pleasure inside of him repeatedly his penis was already turgid again. The splatter of his semen was not even dry yet.

Looking up into the hungry, feral look in Asami's dark, mahogany brown eyes took his breath away. Takaba couldn't stop the feeling of being swept away. It flooded through him, sending his nerves into electric chaos.

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TBC --
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Comments: After blithely crossposting this everywhere and on my own front door I realize I am an idiot. I have two people who are more than willing to donate some time to beta my Viewfinder fiction. Saturation 1 and 2 is not beta'ed...because I felt horribly shy to have them go over my lemon stuff. But I'm okay about letting more than a couple of hundred strangers reading the same thing.

How's that logical? >.< I don't know...*sighs at self* Please don't kick me for the typos and my lack of a coharent grasp on the English language; I'm doing enough of that on my own. -_- I always was boastful of my carefully perfected English but when I started writing creatively with it I realize I'm exceptionally bad at using it properly. Now that's karma!

I'm sorry that this is on hiatus! I'm working on Samurai 7 fanfiction, original...stuff...and this simultaneously. The original stuff takes first priority. Honestly, Saturation is supposed to be smut for (mostly) smut's sakes! It should not take this long! *runs away*

Date: 2006-07-21 05:29 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lilt-rill.livejournal.com
*is dead*

Date: 2006-07-21 08:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] reality-suture.livejournal.com
Oh, no! I don't want a reputation of killing my readers.

Please wake up!

On a serious note, you just reminded me that I need to re-take my CPR class. Yikes!

D

Date: 2006-07-21 05:44 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] akuma-river.livejournal.com
Wow...

That was so hot. Is this placed at the beginning of the canon series? 'Cause it sounds like it is during the three days that Akihito spent with Asami...
I just get that feeling.

Anyways, keep up the awesome work, coolsa.

Date: 2006-07-21 08:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] reality-suture.livejournal.com
Thank you! I don't know honestly. I wrote it really quickly. (Which is why I'm still in a bit of shock that it's so...understandable. My written English is usually horrible.) I just put it in the general time frame between the first two books. ^__^

D

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Yikes, please ignore that above Summary. Repeat! XD

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Date: 2006-07-21 07:29 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tweety-ich.livejournal.com
That hurts so much! Takaba really is raped here. And Asami is so scary *runns to hide*

Date: 2006-07-21 08:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] reality-suture.livejournal.com
Thank you for reading this and commenting despite the blood and pain. ^__^ It's very much appreciated.

D

Date: 2006-07-21 08:06 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kafuuma.livejournal.com
hehe, that's how I like Asami, no less :)
really good fic, your english writing is so perfect !!
BTW, is your avatar Kyuuzou from samurai 7 ? *I love Kyuuzou !!!*

Date: 2006-07-21 08:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] reality-suture.livejournal.com
Thank you and I'm glad. Because this IS rape. ^_^ Asami wants something different except he's too macho to really ask. He just takes. One, or maybe two, more chapters and it'll be finished!

Yes, it's of Kyuuzou! I'm also very happy that it's recognizable since I drew it with my mouse. ^__^;;

D

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Date: 2006-07-21 11:14 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] socks-expert.livejournal.com
*creeps out of the abyss* Hi, I've been lurking in this community for a long while, nice to meet you. *bows*

I like your writing, it's tasty and easy to digest. =P
I was surprised to find your native is not english o.O
Huh, well, keep up the good work. ^o^/

*You* drew that Kyuuzou?! Waa... now I hate you even more. =__=

Oh, and Kyuuzou, indeed, worth worshiping.

Date: 2006-07-21 11:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] reality-suture.livejournal.com
Hi! It's very nice to meet you. ^_^ Thank you very much for taking a bit of your time to comment. I do appreciate it a lot.

Aw, the original version of my icon took me four frustrating, hair-pulling months...so though I love it, I'll never do it again. XD

*worships Kyuuzo with you*

D

Date: 2006-07-22 12:53 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] karaq.livejournal.com
.... *drools*
How can WRITTEN smex be so HOT, even when it is rape?!! Shame on you Asami! He'll really end up breaking poor Akitho, but then again...it IS Asami. We all know he must be perfect for S/M. That sexy sadist! ^^
But the not like/love comment was a bit harsh. Is it really only lust? (Or am I just too much of a fluff-person?!) Lol.
Looking forward to the next chapter. XD

~KaraQ

Date: 2006-07-22 06:04 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] reality-suture.livejournal.com
^__^ Thanks so much for commenting every time! I'm glad I'm not disappointing you...yet. *thinks of the finale...well, doesn't want to think of it is more accurate*

Yes, Asami has to do everything, even back-breaking sex, with calm intensity...except this time! XD

I wasn't kidding when I warned non-consent. I should just put "rape", shouldn't I? It's not as politically correct so the readers could be sure that I'm not just...playing around with this.

Date: 2006-07-22 03:14 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] daten-magier.livejournal.com
=0_0= s...sugoi (even if it is rape). *drools* . . . wow. *faints*

Date: 2006-07-22 07:24 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] reality-suture.livejournal.com
*fans* Ah, yikes, *gives water*

^___^ Thanks so much for reading!

D

Date: 2006-07-22 07:16 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pugsley.livejournal.com
Wow - once again I *fainted*. Another *hot* one.

The entire story was seductive and completely arousing. You have no reason to worry about having your stuff betaed. Everyone seems to really enjoy your stories. A beta only helps and your right why worry when a couple of hundred strangers are reading your stuff.

You describe everything in such detail, such as -
He just forgot Asami's broad hands was holding his hips down and only succeeded in shifting the painful fullness inside of him to hit something that sent sparks of crackling fire and ice up his spine.
You made me feel the intense pleasure Aki did.

Takaba couldn't stop the feeling of being swept away. It flooded through him, sending his nerves into electric chaos.
Asami has a tendency to do this to everyone.

Once again thanks for sharing and I look forward to the next story.


Date: 2006-07-22 07:44 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] reality-suture.livejournal.com
Thank you so much for commenting! :D

A lot of people don't like my descriptions in 'normal' writing but in this, writing sex, it seems to be a big asset. I'm so happy no one is saying I'm being flowery or use 'purple prose'.

D

Date: 2006-07-22 07:31 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] astrayhope.livejournal.com
wheeeeeeeeeeeeee!!! The 2 chapter is soooo awesome, its so detailed and unpredictable!! XD Wonderfully done XD!!!! Lol! I'll protect you!!!!! If someone tries to kick you XD!!!! You shouldn't worry so much. English has so many complicated weird rules even I have a hard time ;-;. Lol thanks for writing & sharing XD!!!<3!!!Good Luck with the beta-ing!!!

Date: 2006-07-22 07:42 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] reality-suture.livejournal.com
Aw, thank you for not only commenting but the offer to protect me. That's so adorable...and sweet! #^_^#

D

Date: 2006-07-23 12:55 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shadowed-blade.livejournal.com
Holy crap. I mean really I don't think I can find a anymore words than that.

Date: 2006-07-23 01:13 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] reality-suture.livejournal.com
Thank you so much for reading, enjoying AND commenting! All are wonderfully appreciated!

D

Date: 2006-07-23 03:57 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lovingly-sadist.livejournal.com
1. I realy wonder what Asami's definition of rape is?
2. Smex for the sake of smex is never just smex when it involves these two
its like a saving grace or the vacuum that holds the universe together.

I could hardly breathe reading this... My god what are you trying to do Kill us, I would gladly submitt My Life for lets say 5 or 6 more chapters... thats just being reasonable.

Date: 2006-07-23 09:32 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] reality-suture.livejournal.com
I'm so happy to know this is so well liked! Thank you. ^__^

1.) I don't think I want to find out. Takaba might not survive it. Poor thing. XD

2.) So true! I was trying to capture the atmosphere that Yamane-sama has in her Asami/Takaba sex scenes. I probably failed but I guess it's okay since no one's yelled at me that this is horrible. Yet. I'm now waiting for it. It inevitably comes. :(

Thanks so much again for liking this! Unfortunately this will only have one or two more chapters, at the most. Torque, the multi-chaptered story loosely related to this one will have sex scenes...and an actual plot! XD It'll be debuting...er...next week at the earliest. ^_^

I hope you will read that one as well.

D

Date: 2006-07-27 12:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] k-a-s-h-k-a.livejournal.com
poor aki...
*huggles him*

i don`t have to admit that i`m waiting for more, do i? ^^

Date: 2006-07-27 12:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] k-a-s-h-k-a.livejournal.com
add, i mean add XD
tell me about using english in a bad way ^^'''

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Date: 2006-08-31 11:20 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] teecub.livejournal.com
Whoa... Intense! I <3 it! Good writing here :)

Date: 2006-09-01 07:05 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] reality-suture.livejournal.com
Thank you! #^_^#

D

Date: 2006-09-22 04:18 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] afterburn.livejournal.com
-nosebleed's herself to death-
Damn your a good writer! You say you have bad english? Psh yah right.

Date: 2006-09-22 12:45 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] reality-suture.livejournal.com
#^_^# That's so kind of you to say! I wish I was so confident with my writing.

D

Date: 2007-04-18 11:05 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] loussi-leb-ru.livejournal.com
*fans self*looking forward for the update.

Date: 2007-04-19 09:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] reality-suture.livejournal.com
Thank you, I just don't know if I'm going to do anymore. I don't know where to go from here.

Date: 2007-05-08 01:42 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] paranoia-woman.livejournal.com
I just wanted to give you my take on your writing, specifically this story. I am both drawn to and repulsed by the content. It was great. You writing here is definetly not flowery and it evokes a lot of emotions in me while reading it. I've read it now 5 times over a period of days and I still can clearly see poor Aki sweating and straining against his bonds while Asami is taking in all of him. It just leaves me shuddering to think Asami believes it is all consentual. Thanks for the great story.

Date: 2007-05-08 04:48 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] reality-suture.livejournal.com
Thank you! You're not the only one who found it disturbing. After this second part I couldn't write the next. It did make me feel nauseous couple with the fact that I really don't understand what makes Asami tick I thought it would just be best that I not continue until the entire Finder series was more established.

I do have the outline of at least 3 more done, I just don't feel good about posting it. :/ I'm trying to find my courage and post the third part sometimes this month though.

Again, thank you for reading and commenting, especially when you put thought and consideration into your comments. It means a lot.

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Date: 2007-07-27 11:41 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] leoak.livejournal.com
OOO I like my yaoi hard and this is right up my ally! I wouldn't put it past Asami to do something like that especially if Akihito pissed him off or he had a little to much to drink (if that's possible). I hope you post the next part soon!

Date: 2007-07-28 03:05 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] reality-suture.livejournal.com
XD Thanks! It'll be up soon. Er, I hope I'm not going to jinx myself by saying this.

Date: 2009-06-08 06:29 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] radcat38.livejournal.com
Wow...just read chapter 1 and 2 of Saturation and am now brain dead...like Aki. Cannot believe that English is not your first language. You have captured real obsession here. Poor Aki...Asami is not completely sane here and your writing really does explain a lot about Asami's obsession with Akihito. Makes more sense out of VF. I hope Asami reigns it in in your stories or Aki may not make it out of his twenties. Wow...incredible work.

Thank you~!

Date: 2009-06-10 08:25 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] reality-suture.livejournal.com
Oh my, thank you so much for reading this! XD I'm hoping Asami gets out of this mood too. I haven't posted the third one, though it's finished because the rape contues.

I'm trying to change it but it's resisting. >_<

Date: 2009-10-08 01:39 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] 5123.livejournal.com
more hot and great! *cleans drool*

Date: 2009-10-08 12:52 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] reality-suture.livejournal.com
XD Oh god. I'm trying, I swear.

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